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Is this character a Mary-Sue?

He seems like he might be a Mary-Sue to me, so I was wondering what you all thought.

Name: Takumi

Age: 17

Gender: male

Looks: long, curly, purple hair, ice blue eyes

Personality: slutty, nice, shy, he's very affectionate since he never got very much affection when he was younger

Backstory: he had a normal childhood and good parents. When he was 14 he got a boyfriend. He kept it a secret from his parents since they were homophobic as well as most people in the place where he lived. When he was 15 he was raped por his boyfriend and tried to leave him. His boyfriend didn't let him and abused him for a few months until Takumi's friend got him away from him.

If you need any mais info let me know in the comments and I'll tell you. Also please answer honestly, I want to improve him. Don't just say you don't like him though, because then I don't know how to fix him. Thank you!
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I changed his name from a Japanese name to a British name.
misscrazel posted over a year ago
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Or maybe it was Welsh...idk.
misscrazel posted over a year ago
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Book-Freak said:
I'm not sure if he could be called a Gary-Stu, but I think there is a contradiction in the information you gave: you say he had a normal childhood and good parents but also that he didn't get much attention as a child... If they were good parents, wouldn't he have gotten enough attention?
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Thanks! There were a few parts I skipped in the backstory, so that's why it contradicted the other parts.
misscrazel posted over a year ago
egyptprincess7 said:
He's not a Gary-Stu from the looks of it. I don't understand though how his personality can be slutty? And you did contradict yourself in the backstory. Otherwise he's fine.
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Thanks! Why can't slutty be in the personality?
misscrazel posted over a year ago
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I mean it can be a personality trait but no were on this bio does it prove that he's slutty so it's no point in calling him slutty.
I-Luv-L posted over a year ago
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Well I didn't mention it I guess, I meant to, but he actually does start sleeping with other men.
misscrazel posted over a year ago
BlondLionEzel said:
He's not a Mary Sue
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Thanks!
misscrazel posted over a year ago
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Welcome :)
BlondLionEzel posted over a year ago
neonClouds said:
"Name: Takumi"
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 "Name: Takumi"
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???
misscrazel posted over a year ago
MineTurtle5 said:
Here, check out this link:

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It's really good for helping you know if your character is a Mary Sue/ Gary Stu. Also, you can check out this article. I've found it quite helpful:

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Thanks! I'll check it out!
misscrazel posted over a year ago
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You're welcome! :)
MineTurtle5 posted over a year ago
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used it for al my characters, it was great! Thanks!
misscrazel posted over a year ago
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You're welcome! :)
MineTurtle5 posted over a year ago
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