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So I wrote this song for my girlfriend and I'll give it to her on our 2 months anniversary.. so please tell me what you think of it

Our Love

You have a smile that takes me to another world
It leaves me speechless, without saying a word
You have flawless eyes, they're like a gift from Lord

I can't live without you
Cuz you're my heartbeat
If you wanna set seguinte to me
There's a wide open seat
If you wanna take it
Just come and make it
ALRIGHT

(Chorus):
This is our amor at 13
We're living our lifes while we're teens
Probably you don't know that you mean
The whole world to me

and if I had a estrela for everytime you made me smile
I would be holding the night sky in my hand
We'll just forget our tears, and walk that mile

I can't sing without
Cuz you're my melody
I can't survive without you
Cuz you're my remedy
Don't leave me alone
Cuz it won't be
ALRIGHT

(Chorus):
This is our amor at 13
We're living our lifes while we're teens
Probably you don't know that you mean
The whole world to me

(Bridge):
When you need me I'll be there
Just to show how much I care
When you cry I'll wipe your tear
When you scream I'll fight your fears

(Chorus):
This is our amor at 13
We're living our lifes while we're teens
Probably you don't know that you mean
The whole world to me

smsooom posted over a year ago

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Lucky_Kumar said:

m not an expert but i can feel ur amor which is enough for her...hope u had a wonderful life ;-) and i like the song

posted over a year ago

XxKeithHarkinxX said:

It's not that great, I've heard/read much better.

Is this the first song you've ever written?

posted over a year ago

Ummm.. no but thnx for your opinion anyway

smsooom posted over a year ago

Oh okay, e_e. you're welcome

XxKeithHarkinxX posted over a year ago

XxTheBeatlesxX said:

Cute. But last time I checked, anniversaries are once a year...I never understood why people think it's an anniversary if they've only been going out for a mês or two.

posted over a year ago

Thnx :)

smsooom posted over a year ago

ravissa said:

man, if my boyfriend wrote me a song like that, I would put a ring at his finger and freakin kiss him.

AWESOME SONG, I think ur girlfriend will like it, though I do think it is a bit too long, but ur girlfriend will totally amor it anyway

btw an anniversary is one full year, but I guess two months r fine too :-D

posted over a year ago

Ok O.o thnx anyway

smsooom posted over a year ago

i'm behind ravissa,and sincerely speaking a proud of u, amor never fade u re an amazing songwritter and i believe that some dia u would get an award as one of the best, keep it up buddy i'm bet she would be over-filled with joy when she hear this song.

Mczubson posted over a year ago