oi Anyone Wanna Help Me With My Story?

well, its alright but is that your start?
if it is I think what you should do is have the party in the start instead, like at the beginning something like this:

"Lindsay was so looking progressivo, para a frente to the party. She had put on a topo, início which resembled something mais like a bra, and a mini saia which showed off a bit too much, but she didn't care if she looked slutty; she wanted to be the life and soul of the party. She was in her friend's car in the backseat with Autumn, and they were laughing about what they had done yesterday in class. Lindsay's thick auburn hair fell in waves past her shoulders, her eyes were the deep blue of Australia's seas. She had her dark eyeliner on and her silver eyeshadow with her cereja red lipstick from Rimmel London. Her long, elegent nails were painted black and she was wearing her black stiletto heels.
'Guys, we're here!' Kaitlyn said from the front seat, she was grinning and wearing a short black dress, showing off her long, slender legs. Lindsay grinned.
'And so the party starts here.' she said, smiling wryly. Autumn grinned.
'Come on, girls.' she said, and Lindsay, Kaitlyn and Autumn walked out, heads high, not caring how many people were staring at them. They smiled slightly and sexily as they headed to the front door of Rebekah's giant house. Lindsay knocked on the door, and almost instantly a young and sexy butler answered it, letting loud música sound from inside. Lindsay smiled flirtatiously at the young boy and he smiled back, gesturing for them to come inside. He closed the door behind them and they looked around for any hot boys Chelsea might have brought along with her, like she said she would.
'Girls, ohmygosh you look amazing!" Rebekah came bounding up, her blonde curls bouncing. She was wearing about the same thing as Lindsay but the saia had been cut even shorter and she was wearing too-die-for black boots.
'Yeah, you too, hey, thanks for inviting us!" Autumn shouted over the music.
'No problem, hey! Chelsea's got some real fitties down por the pool! Coming?' Rebekah shouted. Their eyes brightened.
'Hell, yeah!' Lindsay said. Rebekah laughed.
'Come on, then!' she said. The girls followed Rebekah to an inside pool where girls were screaming flirtatiously and boys were watching the girls in their bikinis. Lindsay, Kaitlyn and Autumn made their pick on who to flirt with and separated'"


soz not so good but you can do summin like that mayb ;D ;D


-- Madi

it's a good story what about she thanks him gose início and vamps keep chasing her and he keeps saving her or she keeps bupming into this guy(not litteraly)?????
sorry thats all i got :(

hope it helps :)

I say turn her into a vampire. Seems like an exciting way to go with it

Not to be rude or anything, but your first step should be to use spellcheck. Start the story with why she was partying, that would make mais sense in my opinion.