Hmmm... I guess it's a start. There's some grammar errors here and there, and the part with the note taking kind of confused me. It raised a few perguntas in me, like:
1) Wouldn't the teacher let her write notes or something in class? Lots of teachers do that, and I never heard of a teacher who says you must write notes at the end of class. 2) And why is she thinking about how she is not secretive? Is there a point for it? I mean, anyone could've thought to put the paper on their lap. It's common sense.
Yeah, you'll probably think I'm a hater or something, but I'm just giving some constructive criticism.
posted over a year ago
I think you are saying right, it will help her to improve her mistakes. i don't think you are a hater.
Thank you! I don't think you're a hater. There is a point for why she was thinking about it, but maybe i'll have to editar it a little. Thanks again for your advice!^-^
